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Winston Malone's avatar

I love your twists, Daniel!

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J. M. Elliott's avatar

Ooh, nicely done. I love the dark irony of “Perhaps we taught them too much.”

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you so much, Jacquie! 😊

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Ben Woestenburg's avatar

Well that was certainly a strange twist. And pretty well right down to the last line. Well done Daniel! Deep and dark, but only in hindsight. Funny, you're cheering for them all along, and then you find out that the species they've destroyed is considered a virus. Excellent.

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Nick Winney's avatar

I enjoyed that... wasnt expecting it!

I rarely blow my own trumpet but in view of your story... you might like one of mine. no pressure, i appreciate this is dropping something into your post uninvited so i get what i deserve if its unwelcome and apologies in advance.

https://open.substack.com/pub/nickwinney/p/the-time-has-comefor-love?utm_source=share&utm_medium=android&r=2fhpll

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you for the kind comment, and I will definitely take a look at your story later today. 😊

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Nick Winney's avatar

you're welcome and hopefully you will see why i was so cheeky to drop it in your comments

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Mark Cantrell's avatar

Ah, I wasn't expecting that twist. Nice one. Enjoyed the story.

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Frank's avatar

Absolutey Twilightey Daniel! ...and dare I mumble 'AI' and 'singularity'?

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Ha! Thank you, Frank! Yes, definitely AI-y!

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Caitriana NicNeacail's avatar

Nice twist at the end!

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you so much, SDG!!!

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Chris Deliso's avatar

Good fun, Daniel- imagine if you expand and build out some theemes related to a viral archipelago.

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D.W. Davison's avatar

What’s funny is that within an hour of posting this I contracted flulike symptoms and have been lying around ever since. 😩

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Chris Deliso's avatar

Yikes! Get better! But that would naturally follow the story, of course, on the nature of smart machinery transmuting viruses from one form to another. Remarkable coincidence, or perhaps a co-causal element of fate (stay tuned for today's new poem in a few hours...) Hope you feel better soon, sir.

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Jason Duck's avatar

Can't beat a bit of Twilight Zone

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Jason Duck's avatar

Loved it.

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you so much, Ben, for the encouraging comment. And thank you for restacking the story as well. 😀

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