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You know you’re invested in a great story as the events overwhelm the main character, who has already suffered so much, you can feel your own outrage and anger swelling at the sheer cruelty of it all. This is a wonderfully told tale, Daniel and I always look forward to the next chapter 👍🏼

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I’ve said it before, but I’ll say it again. Your feedback is very uplifting and I really appreciate it. Thank you so much, Daniel.

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Such intrigue! Another great episode! I’m always impressed by your consistent quality

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Thank you so much, Maya!!! Your generosity in sharing links to my story and providing such nice feedback really warms this old crone’s heart. 😊

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I agree with the consistent quality comment. Is someone editing this before you post?

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Thanks again, Jim! I WISH I had an editor! It would save me from those routine moments when I hit the publish button and almost immediately say, “Ooops.” 😂

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It reads so clean, I though you did have an editor!

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Daniel, BTW I saved this chapter to read on Halloween evening. At the end of the previous chapter, I would never have expected Hermann's fortunes to fall any further so quickly! I have never seen so many villains crawl out from under the woodpile as quickly and as unexpectedly. Ludwig was the only one that did not surprise me. But, with good ol Marty's help, the chapter actually seemed to end on an upbeat moment. Not huge mnd you but Hermann still has a tenuous grip on life with his Henrietta still there. I hope he is not going to be separated from her in the next villainy, be it caused by human or werewolf. It was another great ride and I anticipate other marvelous surprises. But one little note - is the phrase 'bugged out" an idiomatic that would have been common in that time period and place?

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Thank you again for the great comment! And I completely agree that “bugged out” needs to be revised. 😀 Part of me wants to make sure that it reads believably. One of the things that annoys me in historical fiction is when characters always speak in elevated diction.

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