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Frank's avatar

Daniel this one lies closer to the truth than we are comfortable with today, but tomorrow we may say what's taking so long. You've drawn out the pain that says I'm alive. Thanks

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JayDub's avatar

I love this rhyming couplet form, it is a true pleasure to read. And once again you remind us that life is fleeting and admonish us not to waste it. We’ll done!

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you again, JayDub!!! ❤️

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Lori Laird's avatar

Beautiful! 💚

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Adrian P Conway's avatar

Daniel. This poem is absolute class. What a gorgeous final stanza. Really fine work. 🙌🏻

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D.W. Davison's avatar

This is flattering praise, coming from a poet whose ear for the rhythmic turn and measured period always delights and charms.

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Chris Deliso's avatar

Very well done, sitr. captures the current time, and the one you were inspired by.

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you, Chris!

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Ben Woestenburg's avatar

Excellent. Very well composed. I enjoyed it.

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D.W. Davison's avatar

Thank you so much, Ben!

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D.W. Davison's avatar

And, of course, I sent it out with a typo in the first line that I had to correct. 😂

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